removing erotic scenes

How I Took the Sex Out of "Chase of a Dream"… And Free Legal Photo Links


I’ve posted about how I released two different versions of “Chase of a Dream,” and now I’d like to show how I removed the sex scenes from various parts of the book without actually changing the storyline at all.

Before I start, I’d like to explain that while I’m usually building up to a sex scene in a book slowly, I keep the sex scenes exclusive to certain parts of the book. I do this on purpose for various reasons. One has to do with continuity and actual novel structure. There’s always a plan. That plan can change at different points while I’m writing a novel, but I think structure is very important.

This is the beginning of the first sex scene in the book. Of course I’m not posting the detailed scene here because I do self-censor this blog. But it will show you how I made the transition. As a side note, the first sex scene in the book didn’t begin until the middle of chapter three.

They had designed the master bedroom the same as the rest of the house. The furniture was stark and modern, with a subtle Japanese theme. The walls were bright white and the floors a rich Brazilian maple. Len was waiting for Jim in the middle of a low king sized bed covered with black bedding. He wasn’t wearing anything but black socks and gray boxer shorts. His slightly hairy legs were spread and he was leaning back on his elbows watching television. When he saw Jim enter the room, he reached down and grabbed his crotch. He squeezed it and said, “What took you so long?” He smiled and jerked his crotch again. “I thought I was going to have to start alone.”

Jim kicked off his shoes and dropped his pants. He stepped out of his underwear and yanked off his socks. He crossed to the bed naked and went down on his knees between Len’s legs.

And this is how I made the transition when I cut the sex scenes out of the book altogether.

They had designed the master bedroom the same as the rest of the house. The furniture was stark and modern, with a subtle Japanese theme. The walls were bright white and the floors a rich Brazilian maple. Len was waiting for Jim in the middle of a low king sized bed covered with black bedding. He wasn’t wearing anything but black socks and gray boxer shorts. His slightly hairy legs were spread and he was leaning back on his elbows watching television. When he saw Jim enter the room, he smiled and said, “What took you so long?”

Jim removed his shirt and said, “I got side-tracked in the kitchen.” He decided not to mention anything about Cain being naked.

They made love for hours that night, in different positions, and in various sections of the bedroom. By the time they’d finally showered and climbed back into bed, it was almost midnight. Jim turned to set the alarm clock and said, “So much for getting to bed early tonight.”

The sentence above this is the key to the transition. “They made love for hours that night, in different positions, and in various sections of the bedroom.” Plain and simple; the reader gets the point without going into detail.

It was an interesting exercise for me. I’d never done anything like that before and I’d always wanted to try it to see if it could be done with erotic romance. And there you are. For those readers who complain about too much sex in books these days, you now have a choice in this one isolated case.

The photo above is a free legal photo from Morguefile.com.

“All of us here at MorgueFile appreciate when you offer to credit the site & the photographer. Mary R. Vogt”

For those interested, here is a web site that lists several places to find free legal photos. I don’t post photos here often, but when I do I like to know I’m not infringing.